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The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.

The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.
The map
illustartes
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illustrates
 the Stokeford
town
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 from 1930 and
same
Correct article usage
the same
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town
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at
Change preposition
in
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 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 huge changes
happned
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happened
from
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since
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 1930
,
Punctuation problem
;
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 they
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 new shops and
also
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 added many
Lagrge
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large
 houses and changed
that
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 to Old age homes.
they
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They
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also
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 removed old garden,
tress
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trees
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 and farmland from the
town
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 in 2010.
To begin
Linking Words
 with,
in
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on
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 the north west
side
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 of
Correct article usage
the village
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village
Punctuation problem
village,
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 they removed old shops and added the new shopping
center
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centre
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, and they
keep
Wrong verb form
kept
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post
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the post
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 office as it was. In the
north east
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northeast
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side
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 of the map, they removed
trail
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the trail
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 and farmland for cows, and
also
Linking Words
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 new houses and extended the primary school.
Moreover
Linking Words
, they created the new
C- shape
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C-shaped
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 shopping centre in the middle of
town
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 for local shoppers.
Furthermore
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,
in
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on
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 south
east
Correct word choice
southeast
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side
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 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Stokeford
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Stokeford,
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 they converted and
extend
Wrong verb form
extended
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large
Correct article usage
a large
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 house to
Retirement
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a Retirement
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 home for senior
citizen
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citizens
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 of the
town
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 and connected
to
Correct pronoun usage
it to
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main
Correct article usage
the main
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 road,
while
Linking Words
 they cut down some
tress
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trees
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 from the city
center
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centre
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. In the south west
side
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 of
Stokeford
Add a comma
Stokeford,
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 they cultivated the old farmland and
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 new shops,
while
Linking Words
 they
keep
Wrong verb form
kept
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Correct article usage
the riverv
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riverv
Correct your spelling
river
 and bridge
same
Correct article usage
the same
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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