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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three differnt countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The line graph illustrates the rates of
the
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people aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in
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USA
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the USA
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 , Sweden and Japan .
Although
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 all the
presantags
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 experienced
significant
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 increase, the rates of
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USA
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the USA
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 and Sweden had some fluctuations. In 1949, Japan had to 5% ,
while
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was
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had a rate of
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 approximately 10% . The proportion of old people in Sweden increased sharply between 1960 to 1980 , but it showed
declines
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 gradually around 14% in 2000. From 1980 to 2020, Japan experienced slight rises
and
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 it continued to increase dramatically until 2040 by 27%.
In addition
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, the rate of
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fall
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at
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 14% in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • demographics
  • population pyramid
  • geriatric
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • milestone
  • predicted
  • reversal
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • historical data
  • future projection
  • statistical evidence
  • life expectancy
  • baby boomers
  • socioeconomic factors
  • elderly dependency ratio
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