Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environment responsibility While others believe that tourists should not accept any responsiblity at all. To what Extend do you agree or disagree.

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is no denying the fact that in recent years
traveling
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has become
more easy
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than ever.
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it is a commonly held belief that a large group of people argue that tourists should be responsible about social and environmental rules, there is an argument that opposes it.
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, I believe that cultural and environmental
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responsibility
should be
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concern.
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with,
visitors
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from other nations could have different cultures
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the desired destination.
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,
visitors
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who are planning to
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a country should respect other local cultures. Which means
vocationers
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vacationers
could do a
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little
research about the nation they are visiting. By doing
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,
visitors
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can gain knowledge and be more careful with their
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.
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, a country like Saudi Arabia has
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apply
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very strict rules in terms of
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apply
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drinking alcohol
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and wearing
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bikinis
at local beaches
due to
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religone
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religious
conditions. Another point to
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consider
is that vocationers should be eco-friendly with the
environment
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environmental
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rules of other
country
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countries
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.
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is because
visitors
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tend to buy food and beverages throughout their trips, which
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produce
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more garbage.
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to
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in some areas it is strongly prohibited to throw garbage at just anywhere, so
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should pay attention to these acts. In Bali,
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, their people tend to use a cotton bag
instead
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of using plastic bags because of the
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law. In conclusion, I strongly
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believe
that respecting and following other social and cultural nations
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a must, because it
contribute
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contributes
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to
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, and reduces
overall
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environmental issues.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion more directly. For example, use phrases like 'I agree that...'
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better. You could use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', 'finally'. This makes your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling mistakes, such as 'visite' (visit) and 'littel' (little). It is important to spell words correctly to make your writing clear.
task achievement
Your examples, like Saudi Arabia and Bali, are relevant and support your ideas well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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