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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The flowchart illustrates the process of how to use geothermal power and produce
electricity
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.
Overall
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, the geothermal power plant consists of two main phases, which are turning cold
water
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 into hot
water
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 and changing hot
water
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to
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into
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electricity
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.
Initially
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, machine pumps cold
water
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 down to a well at
depth
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a depth
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 of 4.5 km. In the second stage,
water
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 is injected into a well
which
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, which
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 leads to
geothermal
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the geothermal
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 zone.
Thereafter
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, the hot rocks in the geothermal zone heat the
water
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 to a high temperature.
Subsequently
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, hot
water
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 discharges out into
production
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the production
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 well and pumps up
on
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to
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earth
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the earth
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. In
next
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the next
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 phase, the
water
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 is collected by
condenser
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a condenser
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which
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, which
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 turns
water
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 into steam. Later, steam flows into a turbine and makes the turbine
high-speed
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apply
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spin. After that,
rotating
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the rotating
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 turbine produces energy and charges
in
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apply
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a generator. Afterwards, the generator produces
electricity
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 using the power to produce
electricity
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.
Finally
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,
electricity
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charges into
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enters
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 the
electricity
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 system.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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