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The table below shows the percentage of adults in four age groups who participated in various leisure activities in a country in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Age Group / Activity18-25 years26-35 years36-45 years46-55 years Sports45%35%25%15% Reading30%40%50%60% Social Media80%75%60%40% Gardening5%10%25%45%

The table below shows the percentage of adults in four age groups who participated in various leisure activities in a country in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Age Group / Activity18-25 years26-35 years36-45 years46-55 years Sports45%35%25%15% Reading30%40%50%60% Social Media80%75%60%40% Gardening5%10%25%45%
The table illustrates the proportion of four different
age
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 groups of adults participating in various leisure activities in a country in 2010. All the
age
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 groups except
46
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the 46
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 to 55 years
age
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 group showed their dominance in social
media related
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media-related
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 activities.
On the contrary
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, reading is more
favorite
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popular
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 among people in their 50s.
However
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, with
age
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 increasing over time, people showed more preference
in
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for
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 gardening than
being
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for being
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 involved in sports. Younger
Generation
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 seems to like Social Media, accounting for 75% to 80%,
while
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 Reading is more favourite among the older
generation
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, by 20% to 30%. Gardening has seen more popularity among people
when
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as
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it
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they
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 comes to
age
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increase
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apply
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. From
younger
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the younger
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generation
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 to
older
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the older
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generation
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, the increase in interest has
rosen
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risen
 by 5%, 15% & 20% respectively. Sports
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on
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, on
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 the other hand,
is
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are
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 more favourite among the younger
generation
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. In conclusion,
older
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the older
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age
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 group tends to like
Reading
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reading
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, Gardening
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and gardening
,
while
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younger
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the younger
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generation
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 tends to like social media & sports.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, generation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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