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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

Nowadays,
The
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 most important and valuable thing in a
job
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 is the
salary
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. Higher salaries usually
means
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mean
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 more spending on the individual
which
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, which
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 could make him feel better
but
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, but
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 it
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is
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not always true. The higher the
salary
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 is
the
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, the
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 higher the responsibility will
get
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be
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 and the higher the
expextions
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expectations
, so I strongly disagree
with
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that
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 big salaries
is
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are
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 more important than
job
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satisfaction
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.As
i
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I have
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before stated
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stated before
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the
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, the
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 higher the
salary
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the
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, the
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 higher the responsibility will
be
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be,
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 so being satisfied will not be an option.So
Job
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Satisfaction
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 is more important and healthier than getting paid more,
begin
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being
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 comfortable to
work
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 with a team who understands you and
support
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supports
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 you is better than not getting satisfied and paid a high
salary
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. A ceo who is not satisfied with his
work
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 but is getting paid well will start to look for another
job
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 which
even could
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could even
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 pay him less but will satisfy him.
Its
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It's
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 not always about money
sometimes
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, sometimes
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 you need to feel proud and satisfied about your
work
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. Other factors which could increase the
satisfaction
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 of the ceo
is
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are
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 the
work
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 environment, a cooperative and supportive team, leaves, easy
check
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check-in
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 in
check out
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check-out
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, educational courses , workshops ,
an
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and an
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 office close to his house. Getting paid a high
salary
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 with no
job
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satisfaction
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 will make the employee try to spend the
salary
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 on other things just to make
him
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them
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 feel satisfied. In conclusion, I believe
job
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satisfaction
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 is more important than
high
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a high
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salary
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.
bening
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Being
 happy and satisfied is more important than a
salary
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which
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, which
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 could not replace the
satisfaction
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas flow logically. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to help your reader follow your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear introduction that states your opinion. Your conclusion should also summarize your main points more clearly.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples or evidence to support your views. Personal stories or statistics can strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion regarding job satisfaction vs. salary, which is important for the task.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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