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The graph below shows the percentage of people using various forms of transportation in a particular city between 1980 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Note: Since we're in a chat environment, imagine a clear graph showing the following trends:) | Transport Type | 1980 (%) | 2000 (%) | 2020 (%) | | -------------- | -------- | -------- |--------| | Car | 22% | 35% | 65% | | Bus | 28% | 25% | 15% | | Bicycle | 27% | 20% | 12% | | Walking | 23% | 20% | 8% |

The graph below shows the percentage of people using various forms of transportation in a particular city between 1980 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Note: Since we're in a chat environment, imagine a clear graph showing the following trends:) | Transport Type | 1980 (%) | 2000 (%) | 2020 (%) | | -------------- | -------- | -------- |--------| | Car | 22% | 35% | 65% | | Bus | 28% | 25% | 15% | | Bicycle | 27% | 20% | 12% | | Walking | 23% | 20% | 8% |
The table
shown
Wrong verb form
shows
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 three divided years
;
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,
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 1980, 2000,
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and 2020
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2020
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2020,
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 about
people
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 who used many kinds of transportation in a specific city.
the
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The
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 most
favorite
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favourite
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 vehicle is
car
Correct article usage
the car
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, it has three Multiple
increment
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increase
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 from 1980
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, which
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which
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when
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 just had 22% of
people
Use synonyms
 who used
this
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 transportation
to
Punctuation problem
, to
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 65%
people
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 who used
this
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 in 2020. difference with those three kinds of transport types. Cars
had
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have
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increase
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increased
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 significantly in just 40 years.
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Bus and
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Buses
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 and Walking
decrease
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decreased
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 3% from 1980 to 2000.
Bus
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 reduced
slighly
Correct your spelling
slightly
 from 28% to 25%,
while
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 walking reduced from 23% to 20%.
walking
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Walking
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 dramatically decreased from 20% in 2000 to
jut
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just
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 8% of
people
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 who used their feet to do their activities.
as
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As
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 a general transportation,
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Bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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go
Wrong verb form
went
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 10% down in 2020 to 15% from 2000
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 had 25% of
people
Use synonyms
 who used it.
bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
Bicycles
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Punctuation problem
, that
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 had been an alternative
tools
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tool
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 to do transport,
had to
Verb problem
apply
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fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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 to 12% in 2020 from 20% in 2000.
for
Fix capitalization
For
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 conclusion,
altough
Correct your spelling
although
Car
Correct article usage
a Car
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 is quite expensive to
by
Use the right word
buy
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,
people
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moved
Wrong verb form
move
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in to
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into
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this
Linking Words
 vehicle to do their daily activities
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this day
Fix the agreement mistake
these days
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. and
decreas
Correct your spelling
decrease
 their
used
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use
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 of
Use synonyms
Bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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,
bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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, and
walk
Wrong verb form
walking
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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