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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day in 2003 and 2006.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day in 2003 and 2006.
The bar graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of adults of various
age
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 categories in the UK who used the
Internet
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 every day in 2003,2024, 2025 and 2006.
Overall
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, at a glance,
16
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the 16
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-24
age
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group
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favors
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favours
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car
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cars
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 in 2003 but
less
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is less
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 popular for 65 or more
adullts
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adults
. The value in 2004, 2005, and 2006 was the same as in 2003.
Firstly
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, 16-24
age
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group
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utilizing
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utilising
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 the
internet
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 four
fifths
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four-fifths
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 in 2003.
65+
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The 65+
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age
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group
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non
Verb problem
did not
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 use
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internet
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the internet
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 in 2003. In 2004,
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also
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apply
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a
mojority
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majority
 of around 80%
adult
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adults
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preferring
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preferred
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internet
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the internet
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. The 45–54
group
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nearly
Verb problem
is nearly
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 69
percentage
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. The 65 and
more
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older
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 adult smaller fraction
about
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was about
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 19
percentage
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 in 2004.
Secondly
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, the most popular
around
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was around
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 16-24
group
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capturing
Punctuation problem
, capturing
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 100% preference in 2005. The 45–54 and 25–44
age
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 groups were almost equal, at roughly 77% in 2005. The 65+
age
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group
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, less popular
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, in
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in
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with
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 around 18
percentage
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 in 2005. The indicator in 2006 was the same as in 2005.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, internet, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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