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The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart compares how much
energy
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 was produced by wind power in four different counties between 1980 and 2000, with a five-year interval.
Overall
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,
while
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 the amount of
energy
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 in the United States of America fluctuated, that for all other countries increased significantly, with Denmark seeing a bigger change.
To begin
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 with, the amount of generated
energy
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 in India increased noticeably from 200
MW
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 to 1200
MW
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 over the period.
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,
this
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 figure in Germany doubled between 1985 and 1995, after which it improved
further
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 to approximately 900,000 kW
at the end
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 of the period. Regarding Denmark, starting at just over 200
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MW
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megawatt
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 in 1985,
this
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 trend increased substantially to over 1600 megawatt after 15 years.
In contrast
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, the amount of
energy
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 generated by wind rose from 1200 megawatt to just over 1600
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MW
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megawatt
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, but
this
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 was followed by a slight drop to about 1500 megawatt in the USA in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, mw with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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