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The lines graphs shows the percentage of households with electrical appliences in 1920 to 2019 and the number of houseworke per week. Summarize na dmake comparison where relavent.

The lines graphs shows the percentage of households with electrical appliences in 1920 to 2019 and the number of houseworke per week. Summarize na dmake comparison where relavent.
The
two line
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graps
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graph
 illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
 of
household
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households
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 with electrical home
appliences
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appliances
 over the century, and
number
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the number
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 of
hours
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 worked per week
in
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over
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 100
years
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.
Overall
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, the usage of the refrigerator and the
vacum
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vacuum
 cleaner was increased in domestic places over the
years
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 compared to the washing machine. In the same
period
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period,
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 the amount of
house work
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housework
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 by humans
was
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decreased.
To begin
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 with, in
year
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the year
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 1920, the house with the fridge was around 2%
than
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then
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 was climbed significantly till 1980,
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then
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and then
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 was remained steady for
next
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the next
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 30
years
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.
Moreover
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, the
vacume
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vacuum
 cleaner
have
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has
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similar
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a similar
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 trend, was in 30% homes in 1920, after that was climbed till 2000 and
reamained
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remained
 steady with
same
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the same
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 amount of percentage
with
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as
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 the refrigerator.
Furthermore
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, the washing machine
have
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has
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little
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a little
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 fluctuating trend with
highest
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the highest
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 percentage in 1920, after
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then
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that
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 it
was going
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went
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 up till 1960 and fell marginally in
next
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the next
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 year,
then
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 finished with nearly 70% in 2019.
Due to
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this
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, the number of
hours
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 worked by humans
was
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apply
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declined over the
years
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 with
incresed
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increased
 use of home
appliences
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appliances
,
with
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from
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 50
hours
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 a week in 1920
,
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apply
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 which just 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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