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In many places, new houses are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

Housing is a basic need for human
being
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beings
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. Some countries countered
problem
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the problem
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 regarding
lack
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the lack
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 of
availibility
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availability
 to build new housing
complex
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complexes
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. Lots of space
are
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is
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 required to build
houses
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, especially landed
houses
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.
While
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 the demand
of
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for
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house
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houses
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is
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apply
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increases, the
availibility
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availability
 of land
tend
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tends
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 to decrease
due to
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 a high demand
of
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for
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 land to build new
houses
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. In my opinion, it is important for the government to start to consider building
house
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houses
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 in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 to
provides
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 new residential spaces. There are several reasons why building new residential spaces in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 is a good option.
Firtst
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First
, it will
give
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impact
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an impact
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 in boosting the growth of
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countryside
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the countryside
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 area. Most
countryside
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 areas tend to have slower growth in economic
.
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growth.
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 Not only that, they
also
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 tend to fall behind in the development
aspects
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that
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which
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 is caused by not many economic activities
happen
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happening
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 there. Public facilities
such
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 as hospitals, schools, and shopping
centre
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centres
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 are usually built around the city, resulting
the
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in the
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 economic activities
focused
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being focused
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 only there.
By building
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 new public facilities to support
the life in
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life in the
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countryside
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 will
also
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 result in
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 economic
equalization
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. Making the
countryside
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 more alive by increasing its population can lead to
the
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apply
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similar opportunities
of
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for
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 life quality as in the city. In conclusion, building
houses
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 in the
countryside
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 doesn't relate
with
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to
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 doing harm
with
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to
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 the area.
Conversely
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, it gives some good benefits for the government.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs have clear main ideas. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
task achievement
Use more examples to support your points.
grammar
Check your grammar and spelling for mistakes, as some words are misspelled.
coherence and cohesion
Add a stronger conclusion that reflects on your main points more clearly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and present it in the introduction.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing shortage
  • preserving
  • natural habitats
  • biodiversity
  • responsible
  • sustainable development
  • government policies
  • urban development
  • alternative housing options
  • renovating
  • repurposing
  • unused spaces
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