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Students in university education should develop specialists in one subject area rather than develop a wider range of different subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In recent
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,the issue of
college
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whether college
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student
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students
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develop
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to develop
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specialists
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the
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only
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 rather than develop a wider range of different subjects has sparked heated debate.
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 my perspective.I completely agree with it.
Body paragraph 1
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 why I agree is that
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student
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students
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 should develop
specialists
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 in
one
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subject
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,
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 is because, just
study
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subject
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student
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 will
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concentrate more
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 on the
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which
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 will not
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be distracted
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 by other
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subjects
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,so
people
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 can have
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a deep
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 comprehension
about
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this
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subject
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people
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 can find a better job which
need
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a
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talent in
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 region.
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,
people
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 who learn about
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subjects like
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 electronic and electrical engineering
that is
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one
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 of the most popular
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subject
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subjects
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 now.If
people
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 do not focus on
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subject
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,
people
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 may
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 competitive force in
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labor
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 resource market.
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, I think
people
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 need to focus on
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subject
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,another compelling
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reduce
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reduces
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 the stress from
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study
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studying
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have
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has
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 more
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time for management.
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develop
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developing
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specialists
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one
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allow
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allows
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student
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students
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allocate
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to allocate
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the
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their
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 time reasonably
,
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student
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Students
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 in university may under a high
study
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,
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;
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study
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like
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this
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can
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way can
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avoid
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declined
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due to
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study
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studying
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 multiple
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subject
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subjects
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,I firmly believe that
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developing
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specialists
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developing
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 a wider range of different subjects.Only by doing so can we have more
compeitive
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competitive
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the market
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 and have more break time to distribute.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to make clear connections between your ideas. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'however' and 'in addition' to help the flow.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic and stick to it throughout your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, which is good for essay structure.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expertise
  • Authorities
  • Specialization
  • Niches
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Innovation
  • Adaptability
  • Generalists
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving
  • Career shifts
  • Academic isolation
  • Employability
  • Collaborative skills
  • Networking
  • Educational systems
  • Rapidly changing job market
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