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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place ina local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in good spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to express our dissatisfaction during our recent visit
in
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 your Cabana hotel. I am Sam
and
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working
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 as a manager in Bros enterprises. I selected your venue for
meeting
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the meeting
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 because I was quite familiar with the calm environment. And most of the colleagues appreciate it
and
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 they liked the location, green surroundings and the sitting arrangement of your place. But they complained about the
food
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, we ordered some
mexican
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Mexican
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,
chinese
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Chinese
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 and indian
food
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but
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 we got microwaved
food
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and
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 I thought
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food
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the food
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 was not fresh. Even the indian
food
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 was spicy and mild. And we did not get any kind of complimentary drinks or desserts
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was
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 mentioned earlier in the menu. I want you to give some suggestions to improve the performance of your hotel. You can hire trained staff, include
variety
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a variety
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 of cuisines and warn them to serve microwave or
freezed
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frozen
food
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 to consumers.
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, you can ask guests to give you
a
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apply
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feedback about your
staff
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staff's
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 performance. I hope you will consider it acceptable. I look forward to hearing from you soon! Yours
Sincerely
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, Sam.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly express each point. For example, separate your likes from your dislikes more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences and structure. It helps the reader to understand your message better.
task achievement
Add a clear suggestion at the end. This shows a complete response to the task.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone throughout the letter. This will enhance your writing style.
greeting and closing
You started with a polite greeting which is good.
task achievement
You included your personal experience with the venue, which makes the letter more engaging.
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