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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

In recent years,
traffic
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 jams have become one of the top global issues impacting many developed cities. There are some causes
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why
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 is happening and what can be done to tackle
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 problem. In
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 concerning the high volume of
traffic
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 and how to solve
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 complex matter. There are two main causes of
traffic
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 congestion , namely the increasing
number
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 of vehicles and overuse of roads. More and more wheels on the roadway simply because populations in all urban areas have increased drastically , which
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 triple the
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 of
cars
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 in each household. Research conducted in five cities in New Zealand with 200 households found that the average
number
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 of
cars
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 in each house was three , and the most owned in big families was ten, so they needed to drive because the public transport was insufficient. Not only are there
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, motorbikes, and bicycles on the roads, but
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 tourists and construction happening
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 overcrowding the way. Even pedestrians crossing the
road
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 incorrectly can hold up vehicles or cause accidents, making the
traffic
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 worse in almost all cities. Authorities can put in place some strategies to reduce
traffic
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 jams in those crowded spaces. By implementing a rule to maximise the total of two
cars
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 owned in each household , and promoting public transport use
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. Each member of the house can either alternate turns to drive or use public transport as
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, reducing the overloaded
traffic
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 on the highway. Smart
Road
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 usage should be introduced to citizens on how to share the
road
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. If there is construction happening around, safe detours need to be provided for both pedestrians and drivers to avoid queues. In conclusion,
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 congested
traffic
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 is a problematic issue for all around the world, there are actions that can be taken seriously. In my view, I think both the overfull
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 of vehicles and overflowing movement on the
road
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 are the key factors, and governments should tackle these concerning issues urgently.

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Make sure to clearly explain your main points, and provide examples that directly support them.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Try to make your introduction and conclusion more specific to your opinion and solutions.
task achievement
You have identified clear causes and solutions to traffic congestion, which gives your essay good focus.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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