You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

Dear Raman Singh, I am writing

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letter to express concern about the cleanliness of the facilities. I recently visited a local pool at the

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Saturday. It was a busy day. The changing room was dirty and the water in the pool was unclear. The staffe have made some efforts to solve the issue by cleaning the rooms quickly and inform the swimmers about the situation. It has not fully resolved the problem. I would like to suggest some solutions to alleviate the issue. Hiring dedicated cleaning staff available during peak hours is the best idea to maintain the cleanliness. The swimming pool management impliments a regular cleaning schedule. I am looking forward for your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

rupindersamrow222

Jul 8, 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to check your spelling, e.g., 'staffe' should be 'staff'.

task achievement

Try to give more details about how the staff cleaned the rooms. This will give a clearer picture of the situation.

coherence and cohesion

Make your closing sentence more polite. Instead of 'I am looking forward for your positive consideration', try 'I hope for your understanding and a quick response.'

coherence and cohesion

You have a clear layout for each paragraph, which is good!

task achievement

You addressed the issue directly and suggested a solution, showing good understanding of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

122 words

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cleanliness
facilities
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quick clean-up
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regular cleaning schedule
peak hours
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dedicated cleaning staff
maintain cleanliness

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