You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

Dear Raman Singh, I am writing
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letter to express concern about the cleanliness of the facilities. I recently visited a local pool at the
last
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Saturday. It was a busy day. The changing room was dirty and the water in the pool was unclear. The staffe have made some efforts to solve the issue by cleaning the rooms quickly and inform the swimmers about the situation. It has not fully resolved the problem. I would like to suggest some solutions to alleviate the issue. Hiring dedicated cleaning staff available during peak hours is the best idea to maintain the cleanliness. The swimming pool management impliments a regular cleaning schedule. I am looking forward for your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling, e.g., 'staffe' should be 'staff'.
task achievement
Try to give more details about how the staff cleaned the rooms. This will give a clearer picture of the situation.
coherence and cohesion
Make your closing sentence more polite. Instead of 'I am looking forward for your positive consideration', try 'I hope for your understanding and a quick response.'
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear layout for each paragraph, which is good!
task achievement
You addressed the issue directly and suggested a solution, showing good understanding of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • encountered
  • cleanliness
  • facilities
  • issue
  • staff
  • address the problem
  • quick clean-up
  • unresolved
  • implement
  • regular cleaning schedule
  • peak hours
  • thorough inspections
  • dedicated cleaning staff
  • maintain cleanliness
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