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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Huy Tran

The line graph compares per capita average
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dioxide
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emissions
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 in four countries -
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 Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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, it is clear from the graph that the
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dioxide
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emissions
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 increased in two countries,
while
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carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 fell in
other
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the other
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 two nations over the period of 40 years. In 1967, 1 metric tonne
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of emission
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emission
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emissions
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 per person in Portugal,
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 in Italy,
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 were higher than
Portugal
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in Portugal
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, which was over 4 metric
tonnes
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.
Carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 rose steadily before
remained
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remaining
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 stable until 1997 in both countries, reaching about 5 metric
tonnes
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 in Portugal and 7 metric
tonnes
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 in Italy. In Sweden and the UK,
carbon
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dioxide
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were
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levels were
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 higher in 1967, around 9 metric
tonnes
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 and 11 metric
tonnes
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 respectively. The emission of
carbon
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dioxide
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 fell gradually in the UK throughout the period, reaching
at
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almost 9 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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,
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 dropped steadily before
peaked
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peaking
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 at over 10 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977, in Sweden. By 2007,
emissions
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 reached
at
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apply
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around 5 metric
tonnes
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.

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introduction
Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction.
conclusion
Add a conclusion that summarizes your main findings or gives a final thought.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas better, like 'however', 'in addition', or 'firstly'.
grammar
Check for small grammatical errors, such as 'the emission of carbon dioxide' instead of 'carbon dioxide emissions'.
specific examples
You included data points to support your claims, which is great!
main point
You provided a clear overview of the trends in carbon dioxide emissions.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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