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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person, 1967-2007 12 10 CO2 emissions in metric tonnes 0 8 United Kingdom 6 Sweden Italy Portugal 4 2 1967 1977 1987 1997 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person, 1967-2007 12 10 CO2 emissions in metric tonnes 0 8 United Kingdom 6 Sweden Italy Portugal 4 2 1967 1977 1987 1997 2007
The line graph depicts the number of average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal over 40 years from 1967 to 2007.
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,
it is clear that
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 the data of the two nations (the United
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 and
Sweden
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) decreased slightly throughout the period. It is
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 noticeable that Italy and Portugal were expected to continue to increase in the upcoming times. Looking at the line charts more closely, one can see that in 1967 the figure for the United
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 was a higher take-up at around 11
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 than that of
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 at around 8,5
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. In 1977, the United
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 remained unchanged, nearly 11
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Sweden
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 was highest accounted for 10,5
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. There was a sharp downward trend during the end stages, from 11
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 to less than 9
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 in the United
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.
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Sweden
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 reduced dramatically from around 10,5
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tones
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 to more than 5
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tones
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. In terms of Italy, there was a sharp upward trend during the early stages from 1967 to 1977, around 2,5
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tones
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. At the same time, Portugal
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 rose considerably from 1
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 to more than 3
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. Italy surged quickly, making up nearly 7
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 in 2007.
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, in Portugal, there was an increasing trend in the number of CO2 emissions per person
at the end
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 of the period, around 8
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, sweden, tonnes, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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