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Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.

Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.
The illustration above displays the proportions of how often
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Americans eat in fast
food
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restaurants
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 from 2003 to 2013.
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,
people
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how
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who
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 eat once a week in fast
food
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restaurants
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 saw the highest
porportion
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proportion
 among the rest over the 10 years,
while
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people
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 who eat every day
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 the lowest percentage in the chart. On the one hand,
people
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 who eat in fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a week tend to be the most
people
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 who visit the fast
food
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restaurants
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, with almost 33% of
people
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 to the
restaurants
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 in 2003 and 2006, but in 2013 it dropped to reach 28%.
People
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 who go once or twice a month got 30% of
people
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 in 2003
but
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2006
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in 2006
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 it lost
for
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5% to
hits
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 25% in 2006
and
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then
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 it increased to 33% in 2013.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants, people with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food restaurant
  • Frequency
  • Consumption
  • Decadal change
  • Trend analysis
  • Peak years
  • Demographics
  • Eating out
  • Health trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Food industry
  • Demographic segmentation
  • Cuisine
  • Independent outlets
  • Chain restaurants
  • Longitudinal study
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