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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 information about global
population
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 percentages and
sharing out
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the distribution
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 of
wealthy
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wealth
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according to
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 region.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 North America
were
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had
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 the
most
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highest
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 global
wealth
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35
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, 35
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percentage
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per cent
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,
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however
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however,
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 the lowest
the
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apply
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population
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 were 6
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percentage
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per cent
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. The
population
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 and global
wealth
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 provide
aproximently
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approximately
 24 and 3 percentages in China, respectively. After that
in
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, in
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the
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North America were 5 and 34 percentages,
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consequently
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respectively
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. The
population
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 were roughly 15
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percentage
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per cent
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 in other Asia
Pacefic
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Pacific
, India and Europe.
As
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apply
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Regardless
regarless
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regarless,
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 global
wealth
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were
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was
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 28 and 30
percentage
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 in rich Asia
Pacefic
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Pacific
 and Europe. The
population
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 were 10 and 6
percentage
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 in Latin America and Africa.
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Africa and India provide the lowest
globol
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global
wealth
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 of 1
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percentage
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per cent
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. In China and other Asian
regions
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regions,
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 were similar
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of globol
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globol
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global
wealth
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 3
percentage
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,
while
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 the
amount
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percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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were
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was
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 5
percentage
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,
the
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and the
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indexes
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index
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 of global
wealth
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were
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was
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 24
percentage
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 11 times.
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