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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people believe that governments should spend money on the arts. Others assert that this money should be used to improve public services and infrastructure. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe that governments should spend
money
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 on the
arts
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. Others assert
this
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money
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 should be used to improve public services and
infructure
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infrastructure
.
Firstly
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, the
peopel
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people
 who
belive
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believe
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 that the governments should spend
money
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 on the
arts
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 ,
They
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they
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 have their point
off
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of
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courses
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course
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the
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, the
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arts
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a
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are a
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good thing, and it's beautiful to see
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arts
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the arts
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 in
streets
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the streets
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.
Secondly
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,
the
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those
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 who see that we should
ues
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use
 that
money
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 to improve the
puplic servies
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public services
 and
infratucture
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infrastructure
. They are right
becous
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because
 what we will get from
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arts
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the arts
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 if we don't have a good infrastructure and good public
servies
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services
. Conclusion, why
we
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should we
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shuold
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apply
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spend
money
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 on
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arts
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the arts
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while
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 we can improve public service and infrastructure
.
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 We should
begins
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witht
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with
 the most important thing
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, the
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the
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that
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 we go to luxury.
That
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That's
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 my opinion.

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Content
Make sure to have a clear introduction that states your opinion and outlines your points.
Structure
Use clear paragraphs for each point and support them with examples or reasons.
Language
Check spelling and grammar in your essay for better understanding.
Content
You showed an understanding of both sides of the argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • economic stimulation
  • social cohesion
  • community building
  • public well-being
  • basic needs
  • infrastructure development
  • comprehensive development
  • cultural vitality
  • practical benefits
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