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Band 2.5

Private car ownership has been increasing over the past few decades. This has given ordinary people greater mobility, but has also led to concerns about traffic congestion and air pollution. Do the advantages of private car ownership outweigh the disadvantages?

Private
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The private
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car
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 is a great
invention
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invention,
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 it gives
people
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 the
indevendance
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independence
on
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in
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 their lives. In
another
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other
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 words,
private
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a private
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car
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 is
means
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a means
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 of transportation which
people
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 can use
them
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apply
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to move to another place
through
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apply
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it
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apply
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comfortably. Widely
people
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 think that
private
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a private
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car
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 has a
lots
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lot
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 of
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merits
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merits,
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while
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 others
thinks
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think
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 that it has many demerits.
Definitly
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Definitely
, most
people
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using
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use
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 private
cars
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to
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for
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 their
comfortable
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comfort
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 private
cars
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 have a lot of
merits
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, thats
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thats
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that's
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 why
people
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using
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use
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 them
alot
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a lot
.
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, it
a
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is a
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developed
mean
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means
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 of
trasportation
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transportation
 which every
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people
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apply
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can use
them
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apply
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.
In addition
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,
cars
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 become more popular because of the easy
tsanseport
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transportation
 by them. In comparison with
people
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 who might use the private
car
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, there are some
citizines
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citizens
 who
deos
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do
 not
riding
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ride
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 it because of the demerits of private
cars
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. In
another
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other
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 words, the disadvantages of the private
car
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has
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have
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 been developed with the world
developements
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developments
.
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, most
people
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 have
buying
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been buying
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the
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apply
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cars
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 in
the
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apply
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recent years so it is
lead
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led
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 to the traffic problem.
In addition
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, it
also
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 has a great impact on the air pollution
which
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, which
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improved
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has improved
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 the recent years because of the fuel. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
cars
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 have
influence
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an influence
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 on both air pollution and congestion and traffic
of
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on
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 roads. In spite of the various
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merits
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merits,
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 the demerits overcome the
merits
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 because of the big impact on our planet.

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task achievement
Your introduction needs a clearer statement of your opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to guide the reader. This helps in understanding your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and correct some spelling mistakes, such as 'independence' instead of 'indevendance'.
task achievement
Make sure to develop your ideas fully. Each point you make should have at least one example or explanation to support it.
task achievement
You identified both advantages and disadvantages of private car ownership, showing an understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mobility
  • independence
  • economic benefits
  • automotive industry
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • leisure activities
  • social benefits
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • global warming
  • traffic congestion
  • urban areas
  • public infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • road safety
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