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The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the phone calls that have been made by
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Australian
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in
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between 2001 to 2008 for three
differrent
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different
 categories. The
calls
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call
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 duration was recorded in billion
minutes
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Overall
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, it was clear that
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 most of the call was for
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local purposes. Mobile calls have the lowest duration throughout the given period. In 2001, the usage for local calls started at 72
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minutes
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 increased steadily and peaked in 2005, which was 90
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minutes
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Subsequently
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,
locacl
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local
 call reduced gradually from 2006 and it reached
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its lowest
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 point in 2008, which accounted for 72
million
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minutes
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. Meanwhile, the national and international, and
mobiles
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mobile
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 calls saw an increasing trend.
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, the duration for mobile calls was drastically
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 to national and international calls, which
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increase
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 gradually. The call has been made from mobile phones
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started at 2
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minutes
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 in 2001, it
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 rose sharply and reached
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higest
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highest
 call by the end of the period, which was 46
million
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minutes
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. In the
begining
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beginning
, the call from national and international was 38
million
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minutes
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, it
then
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 grew steadily and peaked in 2008, which accounted for 61
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minutes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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