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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps showed an
island
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 before and after building tourist equipment .
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, the
island
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 changed a lot after construction. Many new facilities were added for tourists, including accommodation, restaurants and other
building
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buildings
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. Before the development, the
island
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is
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was
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 completely bare. There were only a few trees and natural land. No buildings, roads, or other facilities existed. It looked very quiet and natural.
By
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Over
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the
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apply
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time
past
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apply
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, from being empty of
human
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humans
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, infrastructure now the
island
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 is
filled
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now filled
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 with new facilities for tourist to enjoy their time here .Two groups of accommodation houses were built in the
center
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centre
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 of the
island
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. A restaurant and reception were built between them. A pier was added to the south of the
island
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, and a vehicle track was built from the pier to the reception and restaurant.
Also
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, footpaths were made to connect the accommodations and go to the beach. The beach on the west side is now for swimming.Not only including new landscape, but
also
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 the
island
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 still
keep
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keeps
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 its natural
characteristic
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characteristics
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 like trees, beach In conclusion, the
island
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 changed from a natural place to a tourist area with many buildings and paths. But the trees were kept in the same places.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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