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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
According to
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 the two maps, we can make
comparison
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a comparison
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with
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of
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 several differences between
two
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the two
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 periods of the island, before and after the travel reform plan
completed
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was completed
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. At first glance, it can be seen that people have built
the
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a
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 series of buildings with different roles,
pier
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a pier
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 and used beach
to
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for
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 swimming. There are
reception
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a reception
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,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 and two accommodating areas. Visitors will move to the reception and restaurant on
vehicle
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the vehicle
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 track,
while
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 the accommodations are connected by footpaths.
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, they have completely kept intact ecological areas
such
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 as forests and the beach but only built
torism sevices
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tourism services
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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