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In many countries, people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could. Why do you think this is? What can be done to change this?

It is undoubtedly true that recycling has been a very significant issue in recent years. By developing the countries , it is more important to recycle our rubbish. But we don't do
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 as much as we should. In
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 from my point of view, the most important cause is the lack of knowledge. By that I mean
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don't
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 aware of the advantages of recycling. Another considerable cause is that nowadays
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 don't care about their environment
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 is a potential concern. To make my point clear, individuals are unaware of how harmful the impacts of not recycling are.
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 to sort their trash and bring
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 to recycling sites.
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, it might lead them to less collaboration.
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 that I already mentioned, there are some steps that can tackle
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, we should raise public awareness and teach
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 about the consequences of recycling.
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, if they know how beneficial it is, they are more likely to do it.
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 schools because children can teach their family too
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 obviously, they have a better sense of collaboration.
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, we should make
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 recycling sites and
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 rubbish by ourselves.
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 public awareness, we can address
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Make sure to connect your ideas clearly using linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'also', and 'finally'.
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Add clear examples to support your main points. For instance, when discussing the lack of knowledge, mention specific ways to educate people about recycling.
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You have clearly stated the importance of recycling and provided some good reasons for the lack of recycling.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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