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The chart below shows the annual rice production in four countries in 2005, 2010 and 2015.

The chart below shows the annual rice production in four countries in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
The bar chart compares 4 countries in terms of
rice
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production
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 in three different
years
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.
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, the highest rates of
production
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experienced
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were experienced
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 in
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country
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countries
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 A and B,
while
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C
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countries C
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and D showed contrasting results. Starting with region A, its increase was stable in all three
years
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,
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.
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in
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In
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 2005, its
rice
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production
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 started with 45
million
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tons
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, and next 2 periods
it
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, it
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 saw
slight
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a slight
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 growth
by
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of
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 2,5
million
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tons
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 each year.
Country
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 B’s
production
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 was at 25
million
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ton
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tons
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 at
first,
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followed by
this
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 year it saw a dramatic increase up to approximately 43
million
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tons
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. In the final year, it produced 35
million
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tons
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 of
rice
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. Regarding
country
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 C, its
production
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 graph was similar as
previous
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the previous
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country
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. The highest amount was in
the
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apply
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2010 at 6
million
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ton
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tons
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, and
other
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in other
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years
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 it showed
lower
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a lower
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 amount. The
country
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 D produced the smallest proportion of
rice
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,
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.
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in
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In
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 the first and second
years
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, the numbers were
at
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apply
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probably 3
million
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tons
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, and until
2015
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2015,
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 it increased slightly
at
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to
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 5
million
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tons
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, production, years, country, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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