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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
The bar chart illustrates the present
Europian
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European
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 health expenditure as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of gross domestic product in the
years
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 of 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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, Switzerland exhibits the greatest health expenditure of approximately 11
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percent
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per cent
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 in all
three
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years
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whilst
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 Estonia pushes out to be the least
which
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 is around 3
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percent
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per cent
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 in all
three
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years
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.
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, no significant change in health expenditure could be observed in Estonia, Spain and
Switzeland
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Switzerland
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three
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years
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.
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, a significant rise in
GDP
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 from 2007 to 2012 is connoted by Denmark, Lithuania, Norway and Poland
whilst
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 there's no
percentage
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 change from 2002 to 2007.
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 in
Luxembourg
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Luxembourg,
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 the
GDP
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 remains at just under 8
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percent
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per cent
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 in both the
years
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 of 2002 and 2007
but
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 there
a
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decline to approximately 7
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2012. France denotes a fluctuation in
GDP
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 from 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2002 to approximately 11
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2007 and
then
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 a drastic decrease to 9
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percent
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per cent
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.
Netherlands
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The Netherlands
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 show a
contant
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constant
 decline in
percentage
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 of
GDP
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 over the
three
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years
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. The bar graph clearly demonstrates that the
percentage
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GDP
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of GDP
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 is more prevalent in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, years, percent, three, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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