Many offices authorities impose a restriction on smoking within the office premises. Some governments have even banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it takes away some of our freedom. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right of course. Give reason for your opinion.

Various office

personnels

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personnel

are suggesting to completely

eleminate

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eliminate

the idea of smoking in

work places

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workplaces

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to create a healthier environment

amoung

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among

the workers who

does

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not smoke. I

strongely

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strongly

advocate

this

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change in the

soceity

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society

to promote restrictions on smoking not only at work

place

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workplace

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but in public as well. In

this

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essay, I will discuss my opinion with

relevent

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relevant

examples from

real

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world. On the one

hand

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this

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is ample, powerful, and almost daily

evedience

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evidence

that smoking is detrimental to individuals'

health

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. Smoking is frighteningly easily addictive that it is destroying an individual's

health

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and

lead

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leading

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to deadly

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diseases

desieses

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desieses,

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although

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effects

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affects

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non-smokers through

second hand

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second-hand

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smoke.

Moreover

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, banning smoking in public

place

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places

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will reduce the

overall

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smoking rate,

will

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and will

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result in encouraging more people to quit. The central reason behind

this

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is twofold,

firstly

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where smoking is hurtful to the person's

health

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who smokes

everyday

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every day

show examples

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, aas

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aas

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well

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as effecting

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effecting

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affecting

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families

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family's

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finances

as well

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apply

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, which leads to family disputes and fuel to the crime rate. To justify

this

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point

here

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, here

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is an example

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imagine a

middle class

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man

smokes

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who smokes

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one pack

everyday

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every day

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which

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, which

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cost

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costs

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$15

appoximately

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approximately

and $450 a month

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whereas

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, whereas

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he is struggling to feed his family and pay his

montly

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monthly

bill could result in family disputes.

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youngters

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youngsters

do get

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are

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influence

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influenced

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by watching their parents, elders

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, sibbling

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sibbling

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siblings

, or other people around them who

smokes

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smoke

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too much

which

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, which

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intensify

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intensifies

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the risk of them getting the urge to smoke. It is very well said that

offsprings

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offspring

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learn what

the

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they

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see rather than what you tell them to do. From the

arguements

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arguments

and examples given, I firmly

beleive

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believe

that

while

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some people see

such

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ristrictions

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restrictions

as a loss of their freedom, public

health

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should be

take

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taken

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priority

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a priority

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over personal choice in

this

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case.

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Make sure to clearly state your main opinion in the introduction.

coherence cohesion

Check your spelling, especially words like 'strongly', 'society', and 'disease'.

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Use clearer examples to support your points, explaining how they connect to your argument.

coherence cohesion

Improve your paragraph connections by using linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.

task achievement

You provided good reasons for your opinion about smoking restrictions.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction and conclusion.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

294 words

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