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Band 4.5

a) You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organization. Write a letter to the manager – Thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience – Explain what you hope to learn from the work experience – Ask some question about the work experience you are going to do

Dear
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Sir
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, I am writing
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 letter to express my gratitude for giving me a chance to learn
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 skill. First of all, let me thank you
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 me for
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 essential opportunity.Currently, there is a huge change coming in
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the automobile
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 sector. People are buying more
hybride
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hybrid
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and
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electric
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. To cop
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with
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 change,
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 training is
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a prerequisite
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as
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apprenticemechanic
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apprentice mechanic
.
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, the
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 of
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 training is holding
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a
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 prestigious reputation as a training institute. I really want to grab
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 opportunity to sharpen my
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skills
. I already have
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 understanding
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the hybride
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hybride
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hybrid
 system. I firmly believe that with the right guidance and little
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practice,
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 I can really help me to achieve my goal. On top of
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 season can boost our business as we can repair newer cars. So, I believe that we can hit two birds with one stone. With regards to
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 useful event, I have some doubts. I just got a time and date for
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 event. But, I want to know full information on it
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accomodation
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accommodation
 and transportation
facilitie
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facilities
 will be provided by the company or I have to manage it. If you provide me
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 full
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details
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detail
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 that would be very appreciated. Feel free to contact me for
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 details. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Pratik

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check grammar and spelling carefully. There are several mistakes that make the message harder to read.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
task achievement
Use a more polite tone in your writing, especially when thanking the manager or asking questions.
task achievement
Thanking the manager shows good manners and respect.
task achievement
You have a clear goal for what you want to learn, which is great!
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