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Band 5.5

You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter your friend. In your letter: Say where you are going Describe your house Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house •You should •You do NOT need to write your own address

Dear Raman, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in the best of your spirits.
Firstly
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, I want to thank you for staying at my place
,
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while
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 I
will be
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am
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 away on a family vacation. As you
know
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know,
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 my home is in
Model
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the Model
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 Town area. It is a
double story
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double-story
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 building with one main entrance, which will be locked when you
will
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apply
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arrive
and
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, and
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 the key will be under the yellow oval pot on the right side of the main door. After entering the
house
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house,
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 please disable the security system by entering code 5128.
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, switch on all the appliances like Refrigerators, Water Filters
etc
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. There are a few things that I would like you to do.
Firstly
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, water all the outdoor plants.
Secondly
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, kindly collect the fresh milk from the main door because the milk vendor leaves it at the doorstep
everday
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every day
.
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, give the garbage to the garbage collector as he comes on every alternate day. I hope you will have a pleasant and enjoyable stay. Thanking you, Jatinder.

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task achievement
Consider including a little more detail about your trip and how long you will be away.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Some sentences could be more focused.
coherence and cohesion
You have a friendly greeting and closing, which sets a nice tone for the letter.
task achievement
The list of tasks for your friend is clear and easy to follow.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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