You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

Hi Alay, How are you? I am writing
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letter to inform you of my recent job change and to give you some news about my relocation. When we chatted on WhatsApp
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time, I told you that I was working at Subway as a sandwich artist. I was making enough money to help
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tuition fees. But
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I recently graduated from college.
so
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, I am
finding
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looking for
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new
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field job. Luckily, I got a chance at one garage which has been in
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business
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fifty years. They offered me an apprentice position . I don’t want to lose
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golden chance.I accept it without thinking twice. Apart from that, I have moved to a new city which is close to my workplace. I will text you the address when you plan to visit us. Just shoot me a message when you get the time.I can’t wait to see you. I look forward to your reply. Your friend, Pratik

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate different ideas into clear paragraphs. This will help the reader follow your thoughts better.
task achievement
Check for small grammar mistakes, like missing spaces.
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Try to add a bit more detail about your new job or living situation to give a fuller picture.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a friendly tone, which is nice for writing to a friend.
complete response
It is great that you included information about your move and new job.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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