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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

Travelling around the world has been a trend for lots of individuals nowadays to get away from their
high pressure
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life
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. There are different views
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 to travel in a group with a
tour
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guide
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 or not. From my perspective, if you are not good at planning trips, finding a
professionist
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professional
 will definitely save half of your
time
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. They can manage all your bookings and care about your safety
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 you don't need to be aware of.
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, when you are visiting a historical place,
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 Egypt, they are able to tell the
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ancient
 stories of how the pyramids were built or how they survived in the desert
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 you can gain knowledge.
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, going abroad with a group of
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 can let you have more interesting interactions with different people and may make new friends
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 of the trip.
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, travelling to some places without a
tour
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guide
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 may have beneficial issues
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.
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, you have to arrange all your schedule by yourself
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, which
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 usually needs a lot of effort. By looking up the information from the websites or books, you can not only learn a lot beforehand but
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 have a
more clear
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 vision of the destination you are heading to.
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, you have more spare
time
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 and more flexibility
on
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in
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 managing the timeframe. Some tours have to stick to the schedule strictly for being on
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on
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at
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 each
places
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whereas
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, whereas
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 without a
tour
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guide
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, you can stop your car anywhere if the landscape is gorgeous and have a longer
time
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 to enjoy the
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scenery
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. In conclusion,
whereever
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wherever
 you are travelling, the most crucial parts are to have fun and be safe. Travelling with or without a
tour
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guide
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 can let you broaden your horizons as long as you are enjoying your trip.

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task achievement
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports your main point. Try to explain your ideas with more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use connecting words (like 'firstly', 'secondly') to help organize your ideas better. This will make it easier to follow your essay.
task achievement
You presented different perspectives on traveling with a tour guide and without one, which helps show a balanced view.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • travel
  • group
  • tour guide
  • safety
  • unfamiliar
  • experience
  • friends
  • sightseeing
  • important
  • information
  • historical
  • cost-effective
  • hotel
  • attractions
  • savings
  • affordable
  • freedom
  • explore
  • scheduled
  • scheduled
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