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The charts below show the average percentages in typical mealsof three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical mealsof three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Analyzing
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 the information here reveals a lot of points. The
provaided bie
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provided pie
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shows
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show
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 the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise
of
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in
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 dinner.
Here
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Here,
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 a reader can deduce that there is
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a
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similarity between sodium and saturated fat
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. the
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the
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The
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dinner it
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highest
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 is the highest
and
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, and
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 the lowest
it
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apply
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is breakfast
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. and
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and the
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The
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 highest of
adedd
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added
 sugar
it
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apply
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is snacks
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. it
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it
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It
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 is clearly
can
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apply
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seen that there is a fast increase
of
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in
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snacks
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snacks,
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 as the charts
shows
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show
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.
To sum up
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, if we can hold a comparison dealing with the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten
to
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too
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 much. We can conclude that there is a big
deffrence
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difference
 between them.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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