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The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportions of leading online travel companies worldwide. December 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides information about the percentages of international companies
who
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 are leading online travel in December 2022. The units are measured in proportions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the Booking.com site accounted for the largest share of the total.
In addition
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,
Others
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other
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 companies had less than 5 %,
that
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which
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make
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makes
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this
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 category the lowest one,
whereas
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one third
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one-third
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 of the share was in
favor
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favour
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 of
Airbnb
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the Airbnb
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 company.
According to
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 what is shown, the Expedia company had
a
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an
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 insignificant percentage
at
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of
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 8 %. And Trip.
come
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came
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 site had almost a tenth at 12 per cent. Other sites were a minor part
they
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, they
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 did not
showes
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 more than 4 %. In terms of big companies, Booking.com in December 2022 had a high sales
about
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of about
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a
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apply
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half of the market share at 45 %. Airbnb company sales
was
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were
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a
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apply
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considerable at 31 of the total,
that
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which
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 makes it the second largest sales in the
statistically
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statistics
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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