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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average monthly change in the prices of three distinct metals: copper,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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, during 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that
over
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the 2014
Nickel
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 show experience
the
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was the
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 most significant and unpredictable compared to other metals. Throughout
the
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apply
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2014,
although
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Zinc
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decline
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declined
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 after but it soon rebounded and reached
peak
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a peak
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.
While
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 until October, Copper fell, it soon recovered and rose.
Firstly
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, in the early years of the period,
Nickel
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 started with 6% in January.
Nickel
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 started at the highest price change with 6% in January and
then
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 bottomed out at -3% in June, it
relatively
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was relatively
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stabile
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stable
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 with -1% after a month, about 3 months.
At the end
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 of the
year
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year,
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 it rose and reached 1% in December.
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,
on the other hand
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,
Zinc
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 began at 1%, it increased and reached
at
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3%. Between February and June, the
number
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price
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 of
Zinc
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price
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apply
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dropped sharply but
then
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 rebounded in November, reaching exactly
at
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2%.
Finally
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, Copper began
2
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at 2
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% in January. From February and June, it
also
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 decreased but
then
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 rebounded in December, reaching over 1.5%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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