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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar
chart
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 illustrates the percentage of weekly income spent by families in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, there are two noticeable points in the
chart
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. The income
were
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was
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 spent
to
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on
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 food in
1968
Punctuation problem
1968,
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 placed first in the
chart
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. The lowest was belong to fuel and power and personal goods in the same year. As presented in the
chart
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 in 1968, 35% of weekly income
were
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was
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 spent
to
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on
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 food
which
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, which
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 is the highest point in the
chart
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three
Punctuation problem
, three
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 times more than any other
factors
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factor
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 in the same year. The percentage of fuel and power was equal to personal goods at under 5% which
are
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is
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 the lowest
points
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point
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 in the
chart
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. In 2018, the
chart
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wissness
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witnessed
a
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apply
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dramatic changes. The
propotion
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proportion
for
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of
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 food was reduced by half
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,
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at
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to
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 approximately 17%. The first place
belong
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belongs
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 to leisure at around 22% followed by housing at just under 20%. Fuel and power still
be
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remain
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 the least spent at just over 5%,
approximatly
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approximately
 2% higher than 1968.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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