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Band 4.5

Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect. In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? — Interrupt and correct the mistake right away. — Wait until the class or meeting is over and the people are gone, and then talk to the teacher or meeting leader. — Say nothing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays,
one
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mistake
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mistakes
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 and
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 when there is someone who can judge.
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, when it comes to the meeting room where the speech is
delievered
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delivered
 by teachers or leaders,
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one
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the
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incorrect
information
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. The reasons behind
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one
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the audience
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Due to
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some wrong
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 can wait until the end of
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 and they can decide to seek
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to
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from
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 the meetingholders regarding
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the incorrect
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.
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that
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, after
meeting
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the meeting
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, there is
possibility
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a possibility
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 that
,
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 the leader might forget
which
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what
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 was to be conveyed, so at that time,
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and
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has to stop the meeting for a
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.
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, the correct
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reach
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be
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 out in the ongoing meeting without any delay.
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,
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one
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 can prefer to remain
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silent
 and avoid
that
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incorrect details, which
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 given,
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after all
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 it is not good because it conveys the wrong
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 to others, who are not aware
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actual
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the actual
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one
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. To say nothing, can be
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hazardous
 for the fellow attenders
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 for the leaders' impression when
another
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other
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 people find the correct detail.
To conclude
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, in my opinion, I believe that
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 the concern within the meeting
,
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 is the prominent way to convert wrong
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with
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to
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 the right
one
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.
Also
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, meeting leaders or teachers
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have
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 to follow it and give the liberty to their audience before their conversation starts.

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task achievement
Your argument is clear, but try to express your points more directly and simply. Simplifying your language can help improve your clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and relates directly back to your main argument. Use transition words to help the reader follow your ideas easily.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic, showing what you believe is the best approach.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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