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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the bar chart provided reveals
about
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the
britich
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British
residence
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residents
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that
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who
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 donate money to charities, which
depictes
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depicts
during
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apply
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the period from 1990 to 2010 based on age.
According to
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 the chart, most of the givers in 1990 were
in middle
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middle-aged
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 age
from
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between
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 36-50 years old
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,
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while
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 most of them were older and about 51-65 years old. Based on the picture,
teanagers
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teenagers
 in 1990 were more likely to donate something
but
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, but
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 the number of them has plunged from
approxiatry
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approximately
 17% to 7% in 2010.
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of givers
reaching to
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reached
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 a peak of 43% in 1990 and almost 39% in 2010, that
has shown
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apply
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people
of
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in
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 the UK were more likely to
offer
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give
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 in 1990 than in 2010. It is
apparant
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apparent
 from
informatiom suplied
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information supplied
 that elderly people
in hasn`t
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haven`t
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 lost the sense of
underestanding
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understanding
.
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 33% of 65 years old -and older people- in 1990 and 35% in 2010
were donate
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donated
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 money to charity.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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