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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the percentage of British people contributing financial support to charity by
age
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 groups from 1990 to 2010.
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, most of the
age
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 groups witnessed
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 downward trend in terms of monetary allocations, except for
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 51-65 and above 65
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 registered an increase. Throughout the period shown, it is evident that people who fall into
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 36-50 contributed the most in 1990.
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, it was
then
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 outnumbered by that of
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 51-65 two decades later. Regarding the escalating contributions, the
age
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group
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 51-65 exhibited an increment of roughly 5%, starting from 35% in 1990.
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, the elderly people
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 saw a moderate growth, ascending from around 32% to 35% by 2010. Concerning the remaining categories, around 7% of individuals who
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from
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 18-25
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 recorded in 2010, which was two times lower than that ìn 1990, at roughly 16%. A striking feature is that two
age
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 groups, 26-35 and 26-50, shared a similar change
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 financial support. Specifically, they all decreased by around 5% over a course of twenty years, with the former descending from around 32% to under 25%,
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 the latter declining from roughly 42% to 35% by the end.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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