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The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the
percentages
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 of
Canadian
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donors
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 by age ( 18 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 49, 50 to 64 and 65 and over) between 2000 and 2015. The units are measured in proportion.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
percentages
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 of
Canadian
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donors
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 by 35 to 49 had the highest figures,
while
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 the
percentages
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 of
Canadian
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donors
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 by 18 to 24 had the lowest. In general, there were noticeable differences among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2000, the proportion of
Canadian
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donors
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 by 35 to 49 recorded the highest percentage at around 48%,
whereas
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 the percentage of
Canadian
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donors
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 by 18 to 24 was significantly lower at 20%. By 2015, the proportion of
donors
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 by 35 to 49 increased to 38%. Meanwhile, the figures for the
percentages
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 of
Canadian
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donors
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 by 25 to 34, 50 to 64 and 65 and over
also
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 changed from 28%, 38% and 32% in 2000 to 25%, 34% and 38% in 2015, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, canadian, donors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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