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The percentage of the population living in urban areas has greatly increased in many countries. Discuss some reasons for this change and some of its consequences for urban planning.

Civil
areas
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 are highly popular with
people
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.
However
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, the rates of
people
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 living in these
areas
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has
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have
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 significantly
rised
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risen
 in several countries. In
this
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essay
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i
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I
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 will discuss the reasons behind
this
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 change and the results.
Firstly
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, the big increase in population in civic places is
due to
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 the
convinent
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convenient
 modern living and the easy access to
services
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. Downtowns have many things to make
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life easier.
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, the
deffirent
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different
 ways of
transportations
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transportation
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. Where you have the chance to choose the most
sutiable
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suitable
 for you.
In addition
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 to the
veraity
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variety
 of shops and markets where you can find anything you need.
Moreover
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, civil
areas
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 are extremely high with all
kind
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kinds
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 of public
services
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.
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, huge house blocks, hospitals and schools. Making these places a good destination for
people
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 to live in.
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although
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 it can cause many bad consequences.
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 as
congections
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connections
 and pressure
to
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on
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 these
services
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.
many
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people
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 moving to these
areas
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 can cause road traffic. Which can lead to more car accidents.
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, the supplies can be
over used
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which
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, which
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tend
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tends
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 to decrease
the
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their
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 quality
of
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it
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apply
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. Making it less
benefitional
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beneficial
 to
people
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.
To sum up
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, the comfortable
life style
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lifestyle
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 and
services
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 in urban
areas
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 can lead to a lot of migration towards
it
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them
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.
Casuing
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Causing
 many results
including
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, including
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 traffic and pressure.

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language
Work on the spelling of some words, like 'convenient', 'different', and 'suitable'.
language
Make sure to use full sentences and correct punctuation, especially at the beginning of sentences.
content
Expand your ideas with more specific examples or details to support your points.
cohesion
Try to better connect your ideas with linking words, like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'on the other hand'.
content
You clearly state the main reasons for urban migration.
content
You address potential consequences, which adds depth to your response.

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