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The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent

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The line graph provides key information about how the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium, the USA,
Japan
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, and Australia changed over the period between 1970 and 2000. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that man aged 60-64 in employment rate in
Japan
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the proportion of
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium remained relatively stable. The percentage of
men
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 aged 60-64 in employment in
Japan
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 had the highest figures
at the end
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According to
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 what is shown, the man aged 60-64 in employment rate in
Japan
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 stood at around 84%,
then
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 decreased gradually to 74%.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium decreased steadily from 8% in 1970 to 7% in 2000. The figures for the percentage of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in the USA fluctuated from 73% and 36% in 1970 to 55% and 39% in 2000.
whereas
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 the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Australia fluctuated from 76% and 16% in 1970 to 47% and 17% in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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