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The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent
The line graph provides key information about how the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium, the USA,
Japan
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, and Australia changed over the period between 1970 and 2000. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that man aged 60-64 in employment rate in
Japan
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the proportion of
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium remained relatively stable. The percentage of
men
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 aged 60-64 in employment in
Japan
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 had the highest figures
at the end
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the man aged 60-64 in employment rate in
Japan
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 stood at around 84%,
then
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 decreased gradually to 74%.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Belgium decreased steadily from 8% in 1970 to 7% in 2000. The figures for the percentage of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in the USA fluctuated from 73% and 36% in 1970 to 55% and 39% in 2000.
whereas
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 the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 aged 60-64 employed in Australia fluctuated from 76% and 16% in 1970 to 47% and 17% in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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