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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Clean
water
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access
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 is a primary human right
and
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, and
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 every
houses
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house
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 should be provided with
as
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it as
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 it improves personal
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neatness
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cleanliness
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 and
pulbid
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public
health
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, but it should not be
a
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apply
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free
access
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 as it
directly
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direct
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 negative effect on
water
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resourses
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resources
 and
manitaining
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maintaining
 and constructing
waret infrustructure
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water infrastructure
. There
is
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are
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 at least
to
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two
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 main
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reason
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reasons
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whay
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why
 every home having
their
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its
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 own
water
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 supply is beneficial.
the
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The
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 first
reason
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 is that accessing clean
water
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 could increase
the
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apply
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personal
neatness
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.
Bacause
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Because
 they have
access
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 to clean
water
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 for taking a shower and washing their dirty clothes
which
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, which
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 results in being neat.
As a
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result
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result,
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 their presence in society in the neaty style could
effectivly
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effectively
 shape the culture of
neatness
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 and beauty. The second
reason
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 is the positive impact on public
health
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. By reaching every home
to
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with
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 clean
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water
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water,
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there
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it
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 is less likely that
people
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 suffer from contagious diseases
such
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 as VABA, which
aprears
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appears
duo
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due
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 to contaminated
water
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.
consiquently
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Consequently
, the public
health
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improve
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improves
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.
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People
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People,
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however
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however,
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 have the
obviouse
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obvious
 right
on
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apply
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access to
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to access
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the
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apply
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clean
water
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 freely
,
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.
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two
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Two
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 main
point
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points
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 should be
mentiond
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mentioned
 that it
shoud
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should
 not be free.
first
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First
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 of all, the risk of wasting
of
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apply
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water
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resourses
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resources
going
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is going
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 to
be
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apply
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arise. If
government
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the government
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 provide
people
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 with
free
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a free
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water
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 supply,
there
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it
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 is less likely that
people
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take
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will take
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a
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apply
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resposibility
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responsibility
 to control
water
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consuming
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consumption
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. Because of
this
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over
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overuse
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use
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use,
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 a huge amount of
water
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being
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is
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 wasted as a crucial
rsource
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resource
 of life
existence
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apply
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. The other and most important
reason
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 is the financial
requirment
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requirement
 for constructing and maintaining
water
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 infrastructure.
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this
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These
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 expenditures should be collected from
people
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 and should be invested
on
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in
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 rebuilding
destructive
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the destructive
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 foundation and
maintainig
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maintaining
them
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it
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. In conclusion,
although
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people
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 have
an
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a
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 clear right to
access
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 to clean
water
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 and it is beneficial for them to increase
the
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their
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 personal
neatness
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 and public
health
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, I agree that it
whould
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would
 not be
a
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apply
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free
access
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 because of the impact on wasting
water
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resourses
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resources
 and
water
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insfrastructure
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infrastructure
.

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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion. Try to use clearer language to express your viewpoint on whether clean water should be free or not.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Words like 'houses' should be 'homes'. Small mistakes can affect how well you present your ideas.
coherence cohesion
When you present reasons, clarify the link between them and your main idea better and make sure to use examples.
task achievement
You have made good points about the benefits of clean water access for personal neatness and public health.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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