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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities 1990 and 2010.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities 1990 and 2010.
The graph above gives the rate of
grow-up
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growth
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 in the countryside and cities
who
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that
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 participated in four kinds of free-time activities between 1990 and 2010.
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, reading was the
biggest
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highest
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 rate through surveys in both
areas
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, with each activity, the percentage in rural
areas
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 always had a tendency to be higher than in urban
areas
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. In 1990, reading was the highest in both
areas
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by
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, by
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 61% in the cities and 78% in the countryside.
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 was the second positive of animation play with 10% in cities and 18% in rural
.
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areas.
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While
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,
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apply
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 the playing took up about 21% and increased
into
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to
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 26% in rural
areas
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. The lowest was for photography, staying at only 7% and 14% in the order. In 2010, reading had the same figure
with
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of
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 78% in both
areas
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.After that, the playing account for 14% in urban and 26% in rural
, photography
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areas, photography
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 went up from 17% to reach 26% in
countryside
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the countryside
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. The smallest for animation with the finger in urban
being
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areas was
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 equal
with
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to
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 one in 1990, but compared with rural was less
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then
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than
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 4 times
than
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apply
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in
the
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apply
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1990
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1990,
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 by only 14%.

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