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Question: The table below shows the number of cinemas in three areas in a European country in 2004 and 2009, along with the percentage change over this period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Question: The table below shows the number of cinemas in three areas in a European country in 2004 and 2009, along with the percentage change over this period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates how the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 changed in five different areas from 2004 to 2009.
Overall
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, the
City
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center
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centre
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 and the New
City
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center
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centre
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 experienced a gradual increase in
this
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period
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, and it was
also
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 evident that the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 in the Suburb and Countryside decreased sharply. In 2004, the highest
number
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 of
cinemas
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 was in the
City
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center
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 (1,512), and
this
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number
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 rose gradually in 2009 to 1,620. A relatively similar pattern could be observed in the Near
City
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Center
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Centre
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, it was 300
cinemas
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, and it
also
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 experienced a noticeable growth in 2009 to 400. Regarding Suburb, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 remained the same at 40 throughout the five-year
period
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.
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, the Countryside saw a major decline; the
number
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 dropped from 108 to 90 between 2004 and 2009, respectively. Despite the changes in
cinemas
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, the total
number
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 grew significantly from 2,100 to 2,287 in
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period
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, which is a modest growth of around of around 6,5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cinemas, city, center, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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