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The chart below shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Analysing the
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. The
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 pie chart shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor
school
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 attendance in the UK. It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise of both parents working and is the highest one 40% in the charts here, a reader can see that there is similarity between bullying and peer group pressure it is clearly seen there is slow increase of lack of
school
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 discipline the lowest one here is upbringing 5% percentage and the middle one is lack of
school
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 25% as the chart shows.
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, if we hold a comparison dealing with shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor
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 attendance, we can
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 that there is a big difference between them.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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