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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Analysing the information here reveals a lot of points. The provided pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity
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 various leisure activities among European adults in 1985
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 1995. It is surprising to notice that there is a sharp rise in 1985 of watching TV here, a reader can see that there is a similarity between family and eating out in 1995 the it is clearly seen there is slow increase in 1995 of watching Tv the highest one in the charts in 1985 and In 1995 is watching TV and the lowest one in 1985 and 1995 is other as charts shows.
To sum up
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comprasion
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comparison
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 various leisure activities among
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Europeans
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, we can conclude that there is a small difference between them.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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