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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today, customers can’t find any food
products
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 from around the world in their local
supermarket
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. Nowadays, supermarkets can stock
products
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 from any
country
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. It’s always convenient when you can find your
favorite
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:
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 snack, drink, or seasoning from another
country
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 in your local store. Many
people
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 have different preferences when it comes to their groceries.
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, some like their seasoning from India or Mexico, and
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 some
people
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 like their snacks from Japan. These individuals can find their desired items in one
supermarket
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 in their
country
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. In the past
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people
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, people
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 didn’t have the luxury of buying
products
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 from another
country
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 or continent. As for now, you can purchase any imported groceries from a shelf. A recent study in 2022 showed that 66% of consumers can find imported
products
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 in their local
supermarket
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. In conclusion,
people
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 in the past struggled to find imported items from another
country
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.
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, things have changed
and
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 now
people
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 can’t find any
item
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items
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 they like from another
country
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 in their
supermarket
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.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly presents your opinion on whether this trend is positive or negative.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words between sentences and ideas to improve the flow of your writing.
task achievement
Provide more examples to support your points, and explain why having imported food is good or bad.
structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
examples
Your examples show different preferences people have for food from other countries.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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