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Band 2.5

You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. -Introduce Yourself, -Explain the situation, -Say what action you would like the company to take.

Dear Mr. Anderson. My name is Tomás Alcaide, and I am writing to you regarding the broken new
camera
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 that I sent back to your
feacilities
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facilities
.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, I have attached to
this
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 letter a copy of the order N°2314 that you gave to me when we spoke
last
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 week. The issue
it self
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,
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 is that you told me that the
camera
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 would
be already
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 fixed and delivered to my address
for
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yesterday.
However
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, I have not received it yet.
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, I did not have any news from you or any other company representative which could explain the delay of the
repairment
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repair
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.
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, I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could assist me
to request
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in requesting
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for
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the total refund of the item
metioned
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mentioned
.
Unfurtunately
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Unfortunately
, I bought the
camera
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 for my vacations
which
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, which
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starts
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 in two days.
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, I need to buy a new
camera
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 and I prefer to buy it in
other
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another
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 place. Looking forward to having your help. Yours sincerely. Tomás Alcaide.

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spelling
Make sure to check for spelling mistakes (e.g., 'feacilities', 'repairment', 'Unfurtunately'). This will help make your writing clearer.
coherence
Try to use more clear topic sentences in each paragraph to help the reader understand your main points better.
content
Consider including more specific details about the camera issue to help support your request.
task response
You clearly state your request for a total refund, which is important for task achievement.
tone
Your letter is polite and shows understanding, which is good for communication.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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