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Government should provide free public Transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or Disagree

The increasing number of private
vehicles
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 on
roads
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the roads
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 is becoming a contentious issue in today's world. Some
people
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 suggest that to improve the flow of
traffic
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, the
government
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 should provide public
transportation
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 facilities, free of cost
for
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, for
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whole
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the whole
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 day and night throughout the week. I partially agree with the notion of offering free
commutation
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communication
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 services.
This
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 essay will
further
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 elaborate
my
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on my
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 opinion
to
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on
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 the suggestion with supportive arguments before providing a conclusion.
Firstly
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, the benefit of travelling
free
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for free
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encourage
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encourages
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people
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 to
use
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 public
transportation
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instead
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 of private
vehicles
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. If more
people
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will
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share common
vehicles
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 to travel,
this
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 will reduce the number of private cars on
road
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the road
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,
consequently
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 reducing the
traffic
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 congestion.
For instance
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,
In
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in
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 Delhi, India, one of the
strategy
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strategies
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 implemented by the authorities to reduce the
use
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 of personal cars on motorways was offering free bus facilities to the general public to cover local distances.
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, providing the advantage to pay zero cost to travel will attract more individuals to
use
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 public
transportation
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which
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, which
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 will
further
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 tackle
with
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apply
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the problem of
traffic
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.
Additionally
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,
this
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 approach will assist in resolving the major issue of pollution that most of the cities face as limited
use
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 of
vehicles
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 will decrease the emissions into the air
which
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, which
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 directly eliminates the air and noise pollution
creates
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created
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 by
vehicles
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.
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, equipping the nation with
fare
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apply
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free transport facilities will create a huge financial burden on the
government
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. There are many other areas for development
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such
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, such
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 as education and healthcare
that
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, that
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requires
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require
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 investment by the authorities. If
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government
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the government
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will be
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is
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 completely held responsible
to eliminate
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for eliminating
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traffic
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 problems ,
this
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 will limit
their
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its
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 ability to focus and overcome other issues that the country experiences.
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, both the public and the
government
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 should work collaboratively to tackle the issue.
To conclude
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, though free
transportation
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 services will divert
people
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 to opt
buses
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for buses
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 and trains to travel
which
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, which
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 will enhance
smooth
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the smooth
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 flow of
traffic
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 but the
government
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solely
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apply
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should not be made responsible
to invest
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for investing
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 and
implement
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implementing
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 strategies.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'however' and 'furthermore' to connect ideas better.
task achievement
Provide more examples or details to support your arguments.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant examples which support the main points.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay with introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is clear.
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