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The line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to a 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to a 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
The line graph gives information on the Australian exports to Japan ,
US
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the US
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 ,China and
India
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 over the period of 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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,it can be seen that there is a steady increase in exportation to China
while
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 Japan and
US
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the US
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 gradually reduced their Australian imports,
whereas
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India
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 with no
any
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apply
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significant changes.
To begin
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 with,Japan partnered with Australia and accounted for around 25% of its exports in the
year
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 1990.
Then
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 it reduced significantly over the next five years and reached 20 in 1995. After
that
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 the rates
were
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gradually declined over the period of 2000 to 2010 and hit a plateau
at
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in
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 2010 and remained the same till 2012. The same goes with
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the US
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US
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US,
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 where
it's
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its
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 amount began with 11% in 1990
went
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and went
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 down to reach about 8% in the
year
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 1995.
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 it rose to the same level as the beginning in 2000. After
that
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 it
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 a steady decrease and reached 5% in the
year
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 2010,though it rose again slightly with 2% in
2012
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2012,
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 it did not
met
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 the starting phase. On
contrary
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,China was at
second
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the second
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 worst when compared to
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india
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India
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 with less than 5% in 1990, followed
a
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by a
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steady growth till 2000 and reached almost 5% .The
deport
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 rates spiked to a quarter in the
year
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 2010 and
was
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were
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 less than a third within two years.
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india
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India
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being
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is
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lowest
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the lowest
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 of all other countries
with
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, with
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 approximately 2% at the beginning
and
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, and
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 peaked in
2010
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2010,
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 where it
had
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a
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apply
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fall
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 again.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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